My tutor feedback is shown below and my comments in italics.
Overall Comments
Congratulations on reaching this point. It’s important to remember that the course has changed in the time you have been studying. Your submission of Transitions is fine and evokes place and the effect of time. I have fed back on your original submission for A5 and looked at Transitions as A6. In our tutorial though we spoke about both the old and the new versions.
Feedback on assignment
Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Quality of Outcome, Demonstration of Creativity
At Level 2 we need your notes on our tutorial. This helps you and us check where you are, what you understand, what help you might need. I understand you are working through this course under significant difficulties but to help your progression it’s best to maximise your time with tutors.
We discussed how A6 did not necessarily require a static camera position of the same spot over the time period. In this spirit of evocation rather than strict documentation your series works to illustrate the seasonal change you spoke about in A5.
The photographs tie together reasonably well, the road becomes more of a connective image than a continuum. There is a cinematic feel here that is worth exploring. Filmmakers such as Terence Malick are useful when thinking about evoking the feel of a place rather than coldly delineating.
It seems a shame that your header image of the flock of white birds is not included. If you loosen up your series so that it is more than a record of the seasons, could it not find its way in? (Sometimes though these are the hard choices in creating series – the most striking single image may have to make way). We’d like to see some process and experimentation here, how were editorial decisions made, what criteria did you use? We know that you have remade the series, it’s important to show how and why.
What place do the short films have in this submission? We need contextual information. With the photo series, graphic and video series we have a rich resource, how would/will it be shown outside of the blog? If the blog is its primary home then all efforts need to be made to guide your audience’s expectations.
Regarding preparing for assessment the key point I stressed was that you look for the best demonstrations of your meeting learning outcomes from your blog. Have a link for each learning outcome. Analyse it, does it meet all the criteria, can it be supported by a second, or at most, third link? Put these evidential links on one document. It is up to you to select the appropriate exercises, assignments or blog posts that demonstrate how you have met the learning outcomes. Choose two or three examples for each of the four learning outcomes. These form the basis of ‘Selection of Learning Log Entries’ submission. Put this in the appropriate folder. Choosing these entries is a useful learning exercise in itself - you are weighing up how successful your own work is at showing us what you have learnt.
You sum this process, and the wider learning experience, up in your ‘Reflective presentation or evaluation’. Again, put this in the appropriate folder. This presentation/evaluation, too, is a useful exercise. You can gauge your successes, see what areas you need to improve and where you may need to ask for guidance.
You can showcase your visual work and put it in the ‘Selection of Creative Work’ folder. This might be where you want to show things that didn’t make it into the first folder but show us who you are (or aspire to be) as a photographer. All three of these tasks demonstrate discernment and your ability to reflect on your own learning.
Assignment 4 will probably form your evidence for Written Work.
Use the Digital Assessment Submission Checklist as a guide. For further help refer to the OCA’s Assessment Guidance resource on OCA Learn and sign up to pre-assessment Q and As with the Programme Leader.
Coursework
Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Demonstration of Creativity
Ensure your exercises are complete.
Research
Context, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis
Support your submission with evidence on your blog of practitioners, working methods, experiments etc. that have shaped this assignment. This means more than your bibliography, we want to see reflection on each of these sources.
Learning Log
Context, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis
Your final piece is well presented (see above for potential improvements, principally in evidencing your learning process).
Suggested reading/viewing
Context
See above, especially show us you have reflected on the work of others.
Summary
Strengths
Areas for development
· Context
· Storytelling
· Evocation of place
· Show process, including;
· Use of references to assist in edit
· Engagement with contemporary and historical practitioners
Please inform me of how you would like your feedback for the next assignment: written or video/audio.
Tutor name
Les Monaghan
Date
23/09/22
Next assignment due
n/a